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You make me more angry than sad,
Thinking of the life you could have had,

Happiness and laughter is what you knew,
Sadness has become, brought by you,

Your life, your days
Your ways have changed

You follow another, you forget your dreams,
Your giving in to torment, it seems,

Follow, dont say a word, dont talk,
Dont stand up for youself, just walk,

Youve changed, your hurtful, your ruining you,
and whats worse is your dragging me down to,

Dont smile my way or say you care,
Friends are forever, you're simply..never there
©2006-2009 ~Gracies-Poetry
:icongracies-poetry:

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Date Written: 2006

*Please be kind on my poems, as they are very personal*

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:iconspritza:
Wow, you really do have a wonderful way with words :)

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The Legendary Spritza has spoken! :sing:

I don't know if life is greater than death. But love is more than either! :date:
:iconmeeden:
Emotionally stated! wonderful :silentkitty:
:iconsparrowlp:
beautiful, darling gracie... love it :)

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Bibbity bobbity bacon!!
:icongilvado:
Heh, I totally empathize with this poem. A few of the rhymes feel a bit forced (the third and fourth lines, for example), and the pacing feels a bit off in places, but overall it's a much better job than I could do. Structured poetry is so much harder than most people realize, especially with the big movement towards totally open poetry with maybe a few rhymes tossed in. Very lyrical, I'm a big fan :). I have major respect for those that can actually write with a rhyme scheme. I just gave up and went open like the rest of the wussy generation :D.

- Gilvado

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anyone lived in a pretty how town
:icongracies-poetry:
Thanks hun :cuddle:

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I felt his lips, Upon my fingertips, I traced the moment.. & fell forever

Photography: ~slowly-falling-apart
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:icongracies-poetry:
Awe thank you so much :tears:

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I felt his lips, Upon my fingertips, I traced the moment.. & fell forever

Photography: ~slowly-falling-apart
Stock: =Gracies-Stock
Drawings: ~Gracies-Drawings
:icongracies-poetry:
Thanks so much! :)

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I felt his lips, Upon my fingertips, I traced the moment.. & fell forever

Photography: ~slowly-falling-apart
Stock: =Gracies-Stock
Drawings: ~Gracies-Drawings
:icongracies-poetry:
Awe that means so much! :)

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I felt his lips, Upon my fingertips, I traced the moment.. & fell forever

Photography: ~slowly-falling-apart
Stock: =Gracies-Stock
Drawings: ~Gracies-Drawings
:iconspitfire06:
mmm i like it.. im scared that ill get stuck in a rut and be wearing somone elses shoes.. so i have my friends to give me an ass kicking when i do that :D thanks for the reminder :hug:

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